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Open to any feedback. Also if you have a title name for this poem. I would really appreciate it. :)

 

If my heart could speak

If my life could collapse

The world would disappear

Into the thinness of nothing

If my cold feet

Couldn't surface

The endless beings

Of this world and beyond

I would take away everything.

My own being, my own mind.

My own fears and trusts

Life is like an existing pain with light

At the end of the road

And we are so afraid

Of that light

That we cast away

In the shadows

Of those lost souls

That refuse to believe in anything

And we become cursed

As our souls begin

To disappear into thin air.

 

 

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I love this!  I believe you already have the title " If my heart could speak"😀.  I would keep it to a flow like this:

 

If my heart could speak

If my life collapsed

This world would disappear

Into the thinness of nothing.......ect..

 

I really love seeing the heart in this poem.  Thank you!

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3 hours ago, Nikki💓 said:

I love this!  I believe you already have the title " If my heart could speak"😀.  I would keep it to a flow like this:

 

If my heart could speak

If my life collapsed

This world would disappear

Into the thinness of nothing.......ect..

 

I really love seeing the heart in this poem.  Thank you!

 

Thanks so much. That means a lot. :)❤️ 

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